English writing / Help ^___^
Posted: 16 Oct 2006 06:57 pm
So, I need some help with my RPG character application, this is what I have done so far: ( I know Ty is great with grammar and any help at all from anyone is very very much loved <3 )
Persona: Akuchi is what we can call a natural mourner ( or loner if you prefer ), he is one of those few persons who likes to be alone above anything else and that enjoys thinking things over and over again to make sure he has made the right choice, this also means he can hold grudges for many years. His lack of awareness about many subjects can be worrying for others, albeit his few peers can never tell if he's actually aware or not and that seems to amuse Akuchi quite a lot. Because, just like any other soul, he has a personality filled with good traits as well as bad traits, like his loyalness and politeness and the fact he's so easily amused even while being so anti-social.
Another important thing to know about Akuchi is his negative behaviour, he never seems to believe in himself and that truly makes things look much harder than they really are, eventually even making him loose some fights only because he previously thought he was doomed.
Physical Stature: Akuchi is very easily identifiable only by his main physical traits, the clashing bright green hair falling down his shoulders and contrasting metallic silver eyes would be enought to describe him since there are not many other souls with similar characteristiques, but he has also an unusually pale skin and is extremelly slim and tall, to the point of some calling him anorexic because of his sick look. Akuchi only heights 6'2 and weights 110 lbs at the time being. While it's not his "style", he has a small lithe flower tatooed across his right cheek with purple ink, where and when he got it is currently unknown.
Bio: Born way back in the first decades of the last century on the small village of Faro, near Portugal's oceanic coast, Akuchi never had an easy life. His childhood was troubled by the war that engulfed all of Portugal's south region, and while some ran away to escape dying from starvation, Akuchi and his family stayed and had to learn how to survive throughout such hard times. When he was 8, his father and 2 of his younger siblings died when their house was burnt down during the night, Akuchi escaped without a single scratch and since that day he started to believe something odd and strangely magical had happened to him. Although being different didn't help him at all during the war, he started feeling that way and Akuchi isolated himself completely from the community when the last skirmmish was finnaly over, at the age of 9. During 10 years he lived on an abandoned shaft near the sea, barely contacting with anyone besides his poor mother and sister that hadn't died and with Swallows as neighboors. There isn't known why or the exact date of his death, but at the time there was already a flower tatooed on is cheek and a Swallow nesting over his body.
Persona: Akuchi is what we can call a natural mourner ( or loner if you prefer ), he is one of those few persons who likes to be alone above anything else and that enjoys thinking things over and over again to make sure he has made the right choice, this also means he can hold grudges for many years. His lack of awareness about many subjects can be worrying for others, albeit his few peers can never tell if he's actually aware or not and that seems to amuse Akuchi quite a lot. Because, just like any other soul, he has a personality filled with good traits as well as bad traits, like his loyalness and politeness and the fact he's so easily amused even while being so anti-social.
Another important thing to know about Akuchi is his negative behaviour, he never seems to believe in himself and that truly makes things look much harder than they really are, eventually even making him loose some fights only because he previously thought he was doomed.
Physical Stature: Akuchi is very easily identifiable only by his main physical traits, the clashing bright green hair falling down his shoulders and contrasting metallic silver eyes would be enought to describe him since there are not many other souls with similar characteristiques, but he has also an unusually pale skin and is extremelly slim and tall, to the point of some calling him anorexic because of his sick look. Akuchi only heights 6'2 and weights 110 lbs at the time being. While it's not his "style", he has a small lithe flower tatooed across his right cheek with purple ink, where and when he got it is currently unknown.
Bio: Born way back in the first decades of the last century on the small village of Faro, near Portugal's oceanic coast, Akuchi never had an easy life. His childhood was troubled by the war that engulfed all of Portugal's south region, and while some ran away to escape dying from starvation, Akuchi and his family stayed and had to learn how to survive throughout such hard times. When he was 8, his father and 2 of his younger siblings died when their house was burnt down during the night, Akuchi escaped without a single scratch and since that day he started to believe something odd and strangely magical had happened to him. Although being different didn't help him at all during the war, he started feeling that way and Akuchi isolated himself completely from the community when the last skirmmish was finnaly over, at the age of 9. During 10 years he lived on an abandoned shaft near the sea, barely contacting with anyone besides his poor mother and sister that hadn't died and with Swallows as neighboors. There isn't known why or the exact date of his death, but at the time there was already a flower tatooed on is cheek and a Swallow nesting over his body.